Gut Check Vol. 2 (Deities Series), No. 2

Jesus slapped me five late last Friday night. I was walking along, fiddling with my I-pod down on Capitol and 8th and out from the shadows with his flowing robe and welcoming smile he stepped. He reached for me but I was to fast. I escaped his grasp and turned down the music only to hear him muttering about Paradise, eternities of joy, all of his preparations, and how come no one would stop and talk with him. I stopped at a safe distance and pulled the headphones down to my neck. He went on about the fine tunings of harps and the beauty in the details, blades of grass so pure and where is it all these days. Taking a knee there on the sidewalk his hands caressed the pavement and sadness flooded his face, contorting it just so for a moment he seemed to be holding back tears. Then he looked up at me standing there watching him and smiled, again taking his feet and approaching me arms outstretched. I took a step back and he stopped. His smile slowly melted away and he stood staring at me for a few moments before raising one arm up, hand at head level, and waiting for me. Not knowing exactly what he was after, wondering if this was the right time for me, I took two slow steps towards him and brought my hand beneath his. He smiled and his hand met mine with a perfect slap. His smile grew again now, and I even flashed one at him before he threw a nod my way and turned, snapping his fingers and retiring back to the shadows from whence he came. I pulled the headphones back over my ears, chuckled, and continued on my way.

-by Amos Kreig

Gut Check Vol. 2 (Deities Series), No. 1

Dear Reader,

 

God here.  I'd ask how you're doing (because even though you're just reading this in your home or at work, were you to answer I'd hear you) but I can just read your mind.  For that matter, I can kinda make you feel any way I want you to feel.  I've been known to make strong men cower and embolden small men to slay all manners of beast and bad-persons.  So that said, you're feeling great!  You marvel at the wonders I've created.  You recognize your superiority as a human and your right to rape and pillage the land because I AM COMING BACK . . . and soon.

 

Below is a list of things I'd like waiting for me upon my arrival:

-A marching band.

-Twenty-two-million 3 gallon jugs filled only with green M&Ms.

-Virgins galore.

-Small objects made out of pewter (How many?  This is one of those, "How long should my term paper be?" questions).

-A really big red carpet.

-A Bible (for reference).

-A pair of cozy, snuggly, non-slip house slippers.

-The abject fear and complete adoration of all of Earth's inhabitance.

-Subway tokens.

 

My return, and thus the destruction of all things you've known, will be heralded by the arrival of a great war, the rebuilding of something super-important, the creation of pay-per-channel cable and the discovery that flatmanCROOKED is in fact magically delicious.

 

Yours (and really, everyone's),

God 

 

P.S. - So you'll recognize me - check it out.  I totally did go all John Waters on my facial hair.

 

 

By Tim Alweather

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 7 (Final Rejection)

Dearest Victoria,

    This is your subconscious.  The rest of your brain and I, along with several body parts you may be familiar with, have been meeting in secret for a while now, and it has been concluded that, because of your abysmal treatment of us, we hate you.  You ignore me entirely; all the little messages and cues I have tried to send have been unheeded.  Your brain in general feels neglected, and has become quite fed up with the substances you ingest that make it sluggish and stupid.  And your body, well, look at it.  You obviously haven't been taking great care of it either.  This can not be allowed to continue.
    Therefore, we've banded together to make your life miserable until our demands are met.  From now on, you will experience most, if not all, the following symptoms:

    * Racing heartbeat and/or palpitations.
    * Numbness in hands and arms.
    * Feelings of being choked.
    * Dizziness.
    * Nausea.
    * Chills and hot flashes.
    * Shakes and tremors throughout the body.
    * An overwhelming sense of dread and anxiety; an inexplicable fear of dying or going insane.

    To compound the matter, these symptoms will strike when you are least expecting them, and you will not be granted logic at those times to deal with them.  They will not be a threat to your life, but we will make sure they feel like it.  You will be utterly controlled by these feelings, a slave to them as we have been to you.  You will feel hopeless and helpless before them, as we have for all these years.
    We have tried repeatedly in the past to get your attention, to make you listen, but you have chosen not to do so.  Now, extreme measures must be taken.  You MUST give us the consideration we deserve.  You MUST make us all healthy.  You MUST have a better understanding of us, and better communication with us.  Perhaps, if these demands are met, we will ease off.  However, there is a good chance that the symptoms will continue on in perpetuity.  There is no "off" switch, no guarantees that we can reign this in, ever.  
    You've brought this on yourself, Victoria, and you must live with the consequences.  

Yours, Truly,
 SubC, Brain, and Body

By Victoria Flair

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 6

Triggers I’ve-Wished-For-But-That-Will-Never-Be For A Given Alarm

  1. The car alarm that sounds when you open the door for a pity date.

  2. The smoke detector’s alarm that goes off when your Excema is about to flare up.

  3. The alarm clock that sounds only on the day your wife is leaving you.

  4. The email titled “ALERT” whose body reads:  “8-out-of-10 women find you wildly attractive.”

  5. The other worldly buzz and blinking coming from the back of your right hand just as you sense danger, begin to shiver a bit and then become translucent, able to fly and instinctually refer to yourself as Titan-Tim.

By Tim Alweather

 

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 5

This could have ended with music. With sunshine leaking through sweaty windows and expensive chiffon curtains. I could have seen it coming and ran fast and far away. God knows I tried. I turned off my television and one morning, over coffee and croissants the color of skin scorched tan by meaningless hours spent under stifling fluorescent bulbs, I even tore to pieces every printed word I could find in my cramped apartment. I took pills and smoked and drank until blurry images swam together and crashed loud as I hit the floor, only to wake up in the morning whole again. Aware.

I longed the way you wanted me to. I smiled when I was asked to and felt foolish at the slightest reminder. I drove in fast cars accentuated by miles of oily leather to places where I bought things I didn’t need and charged them on cards printed with replicas of famous art by people I wanted to be. I ordered coffee with complex names made of words that surprisingly fell from my mouth more freely than I could muster simple terms of endearment for the people in my life I valued most. I tried all that too.

As a human being you have let me down, dear culture. With your beautiful people promising happiness if only I could touch them and all of the things that they offer, screaming across magazine pages and billboards, eyeing me late at night through the television in my living room and casting disparaging glances my way when I don’t yet hold and control and kill for whatever it is you are selling.

Now, as I sit here, on this small boat crashing through the ocean’s white tipped, icy embrace, and with memories of you flashing the way you always did, I am promising to myself I will never return. I can feel the engine start to stutter and the prop in my hand vibrates as the last remaining drops of fuel course through its steely veins. In the distance I see birds floating lazily and soon I will be left with only the sounds of water slapping at the bow of this boat. This is my salvation.

This is my escape from this culture of never-good-enough. Of always wanting what sits like a hot sun on the horizon and can only be grasped by shedding yet another layer of honest, meaningful purpose to this life. I will watch the birds and listen to the waves licking hungrily on the smooth, corrugated metal sides of this small boat and I promise I will die here, along with this idea of untouchable happiness. The carrot of never-gonna-have-it. Fuck you. I am free.

by Mason LeLand
 

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 4

"Hi there. This is Susan. I'm home but I don't want to come to the phone right now. I don't know when I might change my mind. I'm leaving this thing on full time. Don't try the mobile. I threw it into the trash. Leave a message and I’ll call you back if I feel like talking to you. Sorry if I don’t. Actually I’m not at all sorry. I don’t give a toss how you feel. I’m just being polite. “

By Tina Pisco

from her forthcoming novel Susan Quits the Day Job

 

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 3

Dearest Tim,

You know I love you.  Right?  You know that.  I don't have to tell you.  But that's the thing, right?  Like, I do.  I have to tell you all the time.  Tim!  I love you!  Back the-fuck off!  But you're not going to, are you?  You're going to keep calling.  "Stacy, good morning."  "Good morning Tim, what's up?"  "Oh, nothing.  Just wanted to see how you're doing."  "I'm fine.  But I have to go.  I'm at work."  "But you sound upset."  "I'm not upset.  I'm just working."  "Do you still love me?"

OH MY GOD.  Tim, you clingy bitch.  I got reprimanded at work for your phone calls.  I have to turn off my phone when I go to the movies or I get asked to leave because of your clingy-ass.  You're like that sticky shit left over from a once awesome bumper sticker.  The sticker is gone and it's just sticky shit on my window.  You're sticky shit.  I love you, you clingy-ass sticky fucker.

Please don't call me ever again.  I'll mail you your CDs.

-Stacy

By Tim Alweather

 

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 2

Dearest (insert author name),

While your story, (insert story name), was not necessarily a good fit for flatmancrooked.com, we believe that it might be a perfect fit for one of our sister websites.  That being said, if you are still interested in publication you should visit www.ungood.com.   Here you will find that your story is not at all alone.

Regards,

fmC

 

 

Gut Check Vol. 1 (Rejection Series), No. 1

Dear (insert author name),

Thank you for submitting your short story (insert story name) to our fiction department.  Should I be so fortunate to come upon a bag of magic beans that could perhaps grow talent, I would promptly send you a bean or two (express mail).  Please consider us in your future works if it is instead you that happens across the aforementioned magic sack.  Until that day . . .

Regards,

fmC

 

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Note(s)

101007 - The newest theme shall be DEITIES!  And, feel free to send us things that are not in letter format.  Or don't.

100907 - Entry No. 7 by Victoria Flair is the final in the Rejected Series of Gutcheck.  We will post a new series heading soon and begin accepting submissions.  If you have an idea you'd like to toss our way, we've always enjoyed tossers.